Revise each of the following sentences so that the name of the thing, not the thing itself, is defined.
1. He coined the term “the Silk Road,” a network of Eurasian roads and trade routes.
2. Polygyny translates to “having many wives.”
3. We were introduced to the precocious child Prof, short for “Professor.”
4. Karaoke, which means “empty orchestra,” is singing along to a recording of a song in which the original vocals have been deleted.
5. A resume, or a CV (which means “curriculum vitae”), basically a more detailed resume, is the most important document in your job search.
Answers and Explanations
1.
Original: He coined the term “the Silk Road,” a network of Eurasian roads and trade routes.
Correct : He coined the term “the Silk Road” to refer to a network of Eurasian roads and trade routes.
The term “the Silk Road” is a not a network of Eurasian roads and trade routes; it is the name for such a network.
2.
Original: Polygyny translates to “having many wives.”
Correct : “Polygyny” translates to “having many wives.”
The word polygyny is used to describe a concept. However, the concept is not translated to “having many wives”; the word for it is so translated. (The correction encloses the word in quotation marks because the tool for constructing these exercises does not allow italics for the sample sentences; the word should be italicized rather than set in quotation marks.)
3.
Original: We were introduced to the precocious child Prof, short for “Professor.”
Correct : We were introduced to the precocious child Prof, whose nickname is short for “Professor.”
The child is not an abbreviation of Professor; his or her name is. Here, too, Professor should be italicized rather than framed in quotation marks.
4.
Original: Karaoke, which means “empty orchestra,” is singing along to a recording of a song in which the original vocals have been deleted.
Correct : Karaoke (the name means “empty orchestra”) is singing along to a recording of a song in which the original vocals have been deleted.
Alterna.: Karaoke — the word is Japanese for “empty orchestra” — is singing along to a recording of a song in which the original vocals have been deleted.
The name for karaoke, not the activity itself, means “empty orchestra.”
5.
Original: A resume, or a CV (which means “curriculum vitae”), basically a more detailed resume, is the most important document in your job search.
Correct : A resume, or a CV (the initials stand for “curriculum vitae”), basically a more detailed resume, is the most important document in your job search.
The initials for the document, not the document itself, represent the term “curriculum vitae.”
